[quote=“Reverend Danite, post:20, topic:1997”]SILENCE - DO NOT LOOK!!! WARNING - Adult content!
Whad’ya fancy autephex - there’s a place for ya. This bit was modelled on me - literally, I kept grimacing wildly into the camera - the rest I made up! :
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Not looking, might look in a few years or so ;).
[quote=“Reverend Danite, post:20, topic:1997”]SILENCE - DO NOT LOOK!!! WARNING - Adult content!
Whad’ya fancy autephex - there’s a place for ya. This bit was modelled on me - literally, I kept grimacing wildly into the camera - the rest I made up! :
http://www.spaghetti-western.net/index.php/File:Bastard2.JPG[/quote]
You’re a sick puppy Rev.
But I like you 
Seriously though, the project looks like it’s coming along really nicely. Don’t you dare give it up.
It seems funny to use words like “nice” in reference to this project, Rev! But, damn it…this does, indeed, look very nice!
Good work, brother!
Great stuff, Rev. Hopefully there will be a movie adaptation.
It looks great! I really like your “style”. Looks very original. Have you done just these four pages?
These are the only ones finished. I’ve had a few jobs on but I’m back on it now.
More are roughed out and there’s a double page on my board at the mo. The ‘style’ is different to the clean computery coloured stuff that’s about and in vogue - one, because I can’t do it, but mainly because I want some pages to be more loosely painted - looking a bit like the sw posters that we know and love. Many of the frames will directly relate to sws and the posters.
I’ve also been overplaying the ‘porn’ angle in this thread - however, this is a dirty little revenge story about a Scottish bandit MacFie, who becomes an enigmatic Sartana-ery character called Magpie, ‘cos when he signed his name once and the ink ran. There’s two sisters - one lame and mute - who are hired out for robberies and the suchlike by a bunch of peote-crazed nuns. There’s a main protagonist in a ‘stranger’ mode. It’s gonna be quite a convoluted plot, where nobody is quite who they seem and the wild west is no place for sweet li’l girls. Mind you, jus’ wait til they grow up!!!
Hey, Rev!
I certainly hope this doesn’t offend you, amigo…because I mean this as praise…but, your work on this reminds me of Abulí and Bernet’s outstanding TORPEDO 1936 series, not to mention Frank Miller’s SIN CITY stuff (only in color!).
Bravo, amigo!
I don’t reckon I’m gonna be offended 
by that comment amigo, but I’m gonna have to goggle Abuli and Bernet tho’ - shame on me :-[
Rev, “fucking awesome” are the most appropriate words that I can think of to describe your work so far. Can’t wait to see the whole thing. Keep up the good work.
Good stuff! Hey, if you want to throw me in as a character go right ahead. My pic is in the “Post a Pic” thread.
If you would add some beard and whiskey on my pic it could work ;)!
You can use my pic 
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[quote=“Reverend Danite, post:20, topic:1997”]SILENCE - DO NOT LOOK!!! WARNING - Adult content!
Whad’ya fancy autephex - there’s a place for ya. This bit was modelled on me - literally, I kept grimacing wildly into the camera - the rest I made up! :
http://www.spaghetti-western.net/index.php/File:Bastard2.JPG[/quote]
Well done, looks amazing.
'Tis good stuff indeed.
One little quibble - the speech bubbles are a bit too small, thus making it quite hard to read it. Maybe for the next page you could make them larger?
Excellent - this is the stuff I need. I would actually welcome some criticism, because I do need to know if it ‘works’, if I’m gonna be stupid enough to see this through.
I did wonder this John, thank you - I think that the lettering inside the bubbles may not end up being hand written but be done in a more traditional printed style. My minimal photoshop skills :P, would probably run to this, and this would make the text more legible. Also, each page would probably be a bit bigger than you are seeing it (depending what size your monitor is of course). The text may also change - I’m not comfortable with some of the phrases.
I did also wonder about the way the panels are read - I think that may be confusing?
The pictures will change a bit as well - I’m not very happy with the image of the one-eye chap lashing out with the bottle - but it’s easy to get wrapped up in the detail and lose the whole ‘picture’ at the mo.
Please be as ‘constructive’ as you like guys - better now than later.
Hey - excellent - that mug has gotta go in! Thanks.
I imagine it would be clear if the lettering was done on the computer. I read it from left-to-right, is this how it’s suppose to be read, or are some of the bottom boxs to be read after some of the top ones or vice versa?
Nope - left to right - it’s just that some of the boxes contain 2 images - the crippled girl going into the saloon and the card playing (black-jack) pose next to them - but it doesn’t really matter which way they’re read really, altho’ it does change the sequence of events (minimally?). My main concern was from the girl drawing on the cards - to the face drawn on them then to her doing the pencil-twirl. Again, if I was to get rid of the pencil poking out from the card/hat then it wouldn’t matter if it was read down first, or across first. And again, altho’ the sequence would alter slightly it wouldn’t effect the story.
I may be worrying too much about this, and I quite like some ambiguity. But, it is difficult to distance myself from what I meant, and see these thru others eyes of course.
I suppose my main concern is that I’m just not a good enough ‘comic’ illustrator - it’s certainly not something I specialise in. I’m not after ‘showing off’ for its own sake. I actually do have some insecurities regarding this and geuinely value and want feedback - good or otherwise.
I too found the following sequence/order of panels to be difficult but maybe that is due to me not being accustomed to reading comic books (other from Tintin haha).
Well thats the only criticism I can think of at the moment, I’ll try to offer more as you make more previews available.
btw, the girl on the bottom is scarred for life! LOL
Yeah - I don’t do a lot of comics/graphic novels either - think I’ll make the order a bit more obvious from now on in. The bloke getting his brains blown out bit - that’s easier to follow I reckon :).
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